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the government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planet. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money dressing the problems of people. To extend do you agree

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It is believed that funding towards the cause of discovering life forms on planets other than Earth is wasteful and monetary
resources
 should be directed to addressing the needs of people. I fully concur with
this
 notion and will be discussing my rationale behind it. First of all, one of the most costly
program
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 run by the government is that related to outer
space
 exploration. To be more specific, for centuries, researchers have been finding extraterrestrial life outside of our planet incorporated in the form of
space
 missions and the equipment
as well as
 specialised personnel for
this
 complicated endeavour undoubtedly require a large amount of capital. Another essential part of
space
 exploration is the rocket launches which
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 witnessed more failed attempts than successful ones. More than that each failed attempt equates to a considerable amount of money dissipated just momentarily. It is agreed upon that during times, especially financial crises, pouring
resources
 into
such
 a cause of finding aliens is both irresponsible and illogical. From another perspective, humanity has gone through many crises and the present is not an exception. In recent years, the whole world has gone through one of the worst pandemics in the history of humanity and to add to that, during
this
 period there are
also
 conflicts between nations which most notably is the Ukraine-Russian incident. To remedy these problems and tend to peoples’ needs, monetary
resources
 are quintessential. It can be seen that in the past few years,
resources
 were more focused on the development of a vaccine for Covid rather than
space
 programs.
This
 initiative had a positive impact on peoples’ lives in terms of decreasing the number of casualties and the widespread of the disease.
To conclude
, I strongly agree with the notion that spending a lot of money on exploratory missions for finding other world beings is completely wasteful in regard to the loss of capital
resources
 which can be more useful if spent on the betterment of Earth’s inhabitants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government expenditure
  • scientific research
  • technological advancements
  • innovations
  • inspire
  • motivate
  • future generations
  • allocate funds
  • social issues
  • prioritization
  • balancing
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