In some countries, people are now getting married at a later age than they did thirty years ago. What are the main reasons for this change, and what effects might it have on society.

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elder
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age,
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decade. human beings
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married at
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age,from my point of view, Many
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later merely to build
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financially
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will explore in the following essay.
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their way of thinking about
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and having kids, they perceive
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having a family
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money and time.
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a car, home and stable income
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can
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a
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the reason of that ladies, has a lot of requirement
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years.
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, the groom before he
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married her wife
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from him many gifts and money with an expensive weeding,
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, cause that the men
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their
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.
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, the rate of
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getting married decreased sharply,
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the figure of kids
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steady.
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, a wide range of sectors will affected by humans if not getting married, the first one is
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state and education system.
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, the proportion of young will distinct
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of elderly will
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, so, the infrastructure and the market of any society automatically will
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down, For
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China
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a scarcity of young
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and kids,
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starts to invest
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people
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if they need any assist on their
marriage
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,
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house with a small
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salary
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, It is frequently said,
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figure of
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getting married decreased
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because
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the requirements of the bride
high
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are high
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and the groom
he
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can't provide that in
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begining
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beginning
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, the effect of
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beings
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stops
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from
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relations and
marriage
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, the flourishing of the society goes will down.
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