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Today,
people
have more money
than in the past because our world has improved economically. However
, many folks don't know how to handle money
well. This
is something parents
and teachers
should teach kids
when they're young.
Managing money
means being good at things like saving, investing, and spending wisely. These days, people
often spend more money
than they actually make, which can make them run out of money
. Being good with money
means not just saving it but also
making smart choices about how to use it. For example
, owning an apartment and renting it out can bring in extra cash.
It's important for young people
to learn about money
because that's when they start making their own spending decisions. Parents
and teachers
can help by showing kids
how to be smart with money
. Parents
can take their kids
shopping and teach them how to buy things for less money
. They can also
show kids
how to keep track of what they spend and earn in a budget.
Teachers
can also
teach kids
some basic money
skills in school. Learning about economics, for example
, is now considered important in schools.
In summary, even though our world is richer today, many people
still have money
problems because they don't know how to handle it. That's why parents
and teachers
should start teaching kids
about money
early in life.Submitted by despinaiapona on
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