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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
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Today,
people
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 have more
money
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 than in the past because our world has improved economically.
However
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, many folks don't know how to handle
money
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 well.
This
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 is something
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should teach
kids
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 when they're young. Managing
money
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 means being good at things like saving, investing, and spending wisely. These days,
people
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 often spend more
money
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 than they actually make, which can make them run out of
money
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. Being good with
money
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 means not just saving it but
also
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 making smart choices about how to use it.
For example
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, owning an apartment and renting it out can bring in extra cash. It's important for young
people
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 to learn about
money
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 because that's when they start making their own spending decisions.
Parents
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 and
teachers
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 can help by showing
kids
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 how to be smart with
money
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.
Parents
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 can take their
kids
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 shopping and teach them how to buy things for less
money
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. They can
also
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 show
kids
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 how to keep track of what they spend and earn in a budget.
Teachers
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 can
also
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 teach
kids
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 some basic
money
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 skills in school. Learning about economics,
for example
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, is now considered important in schools. In summary, even though our world is richer today, many
people
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 still have
money
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 problems because they don't know how to handle it. That's why
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should start teaching
kids
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 about
money
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 early in life.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, for example".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, parents, teachers, kids with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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