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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the number of families in the United States in 3 different
years
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. Starting with 2007, the data for every 4
years
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 is shown in the graph in 5
income
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 spans. The first
income
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 span with the least numbers is for less than 25,000 $.
This
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group
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 has risen from 25 million households to about 29 million between the
years
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 2007 and 2011.
Then
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 it showed a little setback in 2015. Almost every other
group
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 of families with up to $75,000
income
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 had the same pattern. We can learn from the chart that the largest
group
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also
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 has the most annual
income
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, which is 100,000 $ or more. These families had a little decrease in their amount between the
years
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 2007 and 2011.
Then
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 we see an increase until the year 2015. On that matter, there’s a resemblance between
this
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group
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 and the one that comes before that, meaning that the $75,000-$99,999
group
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 follows the same pattern. In conclusion, there is a total increase in all groups and that can be caused by the population of the US. The chart
also
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 shows that most people in the US are either rich or considered rather poor.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, income, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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