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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are
two
 types of university students. One
group
 are interested in learning some additional
subjects
 rather than only learning their main
subject
. But there is another
group
 whose belief is in contradiction with the first
group
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both views and their reasoning. The first
group
 would believe that they can study related
subjects
 to their own
subject
 and by taking those lessons, they can link with their peers.
For example
, when they study mechanical engineering, if they study some electrical engineering lessons, in the future they may be able to communicate with the other engineers, help each other with the tasks
and
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understand the issues that each one is facing and solve things better.
On the other hand
, there are the second
group
 who believe that people should focus on their main
subject
. When you don’t wander around some other
subjects
, you can be able to get deeper into the core
subject
 and with a good amount of concentration and hard work you can be more reliable in that field and it’s mostly because you’ve spent more time on that
subject
.
For instance
, studying mechanical engineering alone can give you more time to get to know so much about it and do more research. In conclusion,
Although
, these
two
 sets of people would not believe it, I think they need each other. I think these
two
 groups should exist at the same time and there’s no contradiction. We need people who know better in one
subject
 and others who can link
two
 or more
subjects
. By doing so, many things can be done more smoothly.
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