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It was given two pie charts below which reveales online shopping sales for retail areas in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

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It was given two pie charts below which
reveales
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reveal
 online shopping sales for retail areas in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
This
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These
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 two pie charts
ilustrate
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illustrate
 how many Electrons and Appliance
was
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were
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 sold in 2005 and 2010 in comparison with video games in Canada. Electrons and Appliance generally have 65% of sales for two years meanwhile Vidio games possess only 31%.The
diference
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difference
 between them
consist
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consists
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 significant 34%.
Morever
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Moreover
,the stable
increasing
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increase
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 in selling was proved by Food and Beverage.It managed to boost its results from 22% in 2005
until
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to
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 32% in 2010.
By contrast
, Home furnishings fell from 25% in 2005
unto
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to
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 15% in 2010.When one
goods
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good
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improve
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 its primary
whereas
 other products lose their progress.
It is clear that
 Electrons and
Appliance
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Appliances
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 showed the
higest
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highest
 indicator of
trades
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trade
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 and to the contrary Video games demonstrated the lowest result
amoung
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among
 all of
it
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them
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.
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