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Many feed that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think that there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#gym #methods
Nowday
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Nowadays
, as much as people focus
theirself
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their self
body
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bodies
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to make
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fitness
 shapes.
Majority
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 of people believe the best method is going to the
gym
. On the
otherside
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other hand
, some think that
have
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 many different ways
are
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is
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 better
to
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for
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 staying fit. The writer of
this
 essay strongly agrees with
first
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 statement. The
gym
 process
make
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 sure
build
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 a
fitness
body
. Signing a membership of
the
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gym
 may give you the motivation to continue the
stagegy
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strategy
 to have a
well-build
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body
.
Besides
,
group
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a group
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 of professional give you advice, which
help
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 you practice in order to fit your
body
.
Moreover
,
enjoing
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enjoying
 the
gym
 work
to help
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 you avoid risks of danger during
process
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 about physical
due to
experience
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the experience
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 of
guide
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a guide
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.
On the other hand
, having a workout at home has many benefits. Making a plan for yourself
require
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requires
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 your action in workout. You can watch online videos which share tips about healthy
diet
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diets
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 or exercises to decrease fat
on
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in
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 each part
on
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of
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 your
body
.
Besides
, there are
also
 many
professions
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 in the
gym
have
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who have
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 channels on
youtube
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YouTube
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make
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 perfect plans for you to build a beautiful
body
 without cost. In my opinion, the methods which build a
fitness
body
 at home, are only simple exercise or stay balanced diet. It does not spend much money but it can not get a perfect result. Enroling a monthly or yearly membership of the
gym
 which necessary cost you can enjoy
unlimited
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 workout plan and modern equipment support level up building a
fitness
body
.
To conclude
, the
gym
 is a better choice for your building
fitness
body
.
Benefits
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 and
conviniences
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conveniences
convenience
 of it
demonstrated
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 above.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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