The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

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The given line graph illustrates the consumption of

margarine

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, low

fat&reduced

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reduced

spreads and

butter

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between 1981 and 2007

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, the

margarine

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and

butter

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dropped all over the

period

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while

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a low fat spread had

upward

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an upward

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trend. Another interesting point is that the figure

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for

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low fat and reduced spreads first appeared in 1996.

To begin

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with, a

butter

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`s draw started at 140

grams

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and raised

steadly

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steadily

to reach 160

grams

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in 1986. In

this

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period

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margarine

a tub of margarine

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margarine

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declined from approximately 95

grams

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to 80. After that, a

butter

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figure fell,

while

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margarine

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lifted and intersected at 100 in 1991. Over a

5 year

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5-year

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period

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,period

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margine

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margin

remained unchanged,

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contrast

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,contrast

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butter

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decreased suddenly to 70

grams

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. In 2007,

margarine

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and

butter

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indicated 40 and 50 respectively. In 1996,

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apply

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low fat first appeared and showed

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a dramatical

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dramatical

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dramatic

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increase from 10 to 80

grams

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in 2001.

Then

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this

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line regressed

steadly

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steadily

steady

and reached just above 70

grams

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the end of the

period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words margarine, butter, period, grams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

160 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumption
spreads
increased
decreased
stable
significantly
approximately
per capita
remarkable
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started
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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

2.Some high school leavers tent to travel or work while before going to university directly. What do you think are the advantages more than disadvantages?

You are taking a course at a local college. The deadline for your project was last week but you haven't finished it. Write a letter to your lecturer. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you haven't handed in the project yet request more time to do it.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people think the fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case?Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?