The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows how many admissions were issued to sports

events

theme

parks and cinemas in 2009,

Further

, the table reveals ticket prices with the classification of single and family

tickets

to various

events

in the same year. Going to the cinema was both the most popular and cheapest of entertainment in the year 2009, Cinemas attracted more

people

than sports

events

and

theme

parks combined. Whilst 1,050,000

people

attended to watch movies, one out of three

people

visited

theme

parks and 150,000 went to sports

events

. Movie

tickets

were far cheaper than other entertainment venues. Football games cost around $73 per single person with little reduction for families. Basketball and Cricket game

tickets

cost $34 and $24 for individual admission respectively for families.

However

, Cricket game family ticket shows considerable savings.

Moreover

, There was a significant reduction in

theme

park family

tickets

and it saved $70 for getting individual

tickets

for four

people

This

chart reveals the cinema was the most favourable entertainment venue in the year 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words events, theme, tickets, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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