The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows how many admissions were issued to sports

events

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theme

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parks and cinemas in 2009,

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, the table reveals ticket prices with the classification of single and family

tickets

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to various

events

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in the same year. Going to the cinema was both the most popular and cheapest of entertainment in the year 2009, Cinemas attracted more

people

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than sports

events

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and

theme

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parks combined. Whilst 1,050,000

people

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attended to watch movies, one out of three

people

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visited

theme

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parks and 150,000 went to sports

events

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. Movie

tickets

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were far cheaper than other entertainment venues. Football games cost around $73 per single person with little reduction for families. Basketball and Cricket game

tickets

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cost $34 and $24 for individual admission respectively for families.

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, Cricket game family ticket shows considerable savings.

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, There was a significant reduction in

theme

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park family

tickets

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and it saved $70 for getting individual

tickets

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for four

people

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This

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chart reveals the cinema was the most favourable entertainment venue in the year 2009.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words events, theme, tickets, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

170 words

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The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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