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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit.Others think there are more effective methods.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of
people
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 think that it is better to do gymnastics to keep fit,
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 some others believe doing some other exercises is better.
This
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 essay agrees with the latter statement and gives some reasons.
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, the main reason that most
people
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 think going to the
gym
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 is better is that there are a lot of sports equipment and coaches. It is simply because when money on the
gym
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, they can experience some good types of equipment.
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, there are some coaches who can instruct them on how to practice properly.
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,
people
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 who go to the
gym
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 are not susceptible to injury and keep fit with a healthy diet. Meanwhile, some others think there are more effective methods because they must not pay for the
gym
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 monthly. To be honest, some sporters can not afford to pay for the
gym
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 every month.
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, they can replace with others or make their own.
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, there are some
people
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 who use cement or sand to make dumbell and something else. In the author’s opinion, when
people
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 do not go to the
gym
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, they
also
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 have not to pay the amount of money to keep fit.
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However
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 they can try other sports
instead
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 of doing gymnastics all the time. In conclusion, going to the
gym
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 is very good,
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however
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 it is better to choose some effective solution without paying money.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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