The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
The map displays the proposed layout of the future development of a
town
in Norbitron, compared to how it looked before.
Overall
, the
town
layout has been updated to include essential services and residences, which have replaced all of the manufacturing buildings. The updates have improved the
town
's accessibility and functionality. The central feature of the map used to be blocks of factories surrounding the side of the road and runabout, which have now been replaced by homes. To the northern part of the runabout, an extension, bridge and rows of houses have been built, which decreased the size of the farmland.
This
was similar to what happened to the western north side of the layout, 2 arrays of housings rose at the right and end of the extension road.
In addition
, A smaller roundabout has been added in the middle of the intersection on the southern feature of the city. To explain the newly-existed facilities in more detail, to the eastern side of the
town
, a learning institution has been added, taking the place of the previous factory. The previous manufacturing building in the western south of the metropolis has now become a shopping centre and just across it, a medical centre was developed.
Finally
, the southern area of the current location of farmland was taken place by a playground.
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