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The plans below show the layout of a university 's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The given diagrams depict the design of a university
sports
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centre
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's layout at the present and after renovation.
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, it can be observed that the
sports
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centre
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 would be enlarged to add new facilities for various purposes
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 some of the features would remain unchanged. The
sports
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centre
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 currently consists of a 25m
pool
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 located in the heart of the
centre
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 right behind the reception area. Participants can access the changing room on the left-hand
side
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 of the
pool
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 and the seating area on the opposite
side
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 across the
pool
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.
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, a gym can be found right behind the 25m
pool
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 and two courts outside the
sports
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centre
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 would later be demolished to widen the in-house facilities. After the redevelopment,
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 there are not any changes to the 25m
pool
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, the
side
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 changing room and the seating area, there is a wide variety of new features added to the
centre
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. The gym will be extended to the east, and two more changing rooms will be built in the bottom corner of the map.
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, a couple of dance studios will be constructed on the right
side
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 of the map with a new
sports
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 hall built opposite them.
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, there will be a huge leisure
pool
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 erected on the left-hand
side
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.
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