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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for peoples health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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all
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worlds
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advice
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 to avoid it. The main
reasons
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 is the individual lifestyle.
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,
the
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life routines. In
this
 decade most individuals eating unhealthy meals because of their lifestyle.
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,
people
spending
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 most of their days outside
home
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in
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works
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.
so
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, fast foods are the easiest and fastest way to eat.
In addition
, when they
back
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 home after
long
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 day
order
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 meals
are
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 popular for most
people
instead
 of cooking their dishes .
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, the survey done
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 2023
done
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at Sultan Qaboos University showed that 90% of workers
eating
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eat
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 fast
food
 daily.
Therefore
, it seems logical that
individuals
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 life routine is the main reason for rising the percentage of eating fast
food
.
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 the other hand, if
people
aware
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 of the junk meals drawbacks, they will avoid it .
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, awareness is the key to
change
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this
 habit and nowadays there
are
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 delicious
heath
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healthy
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food
 they just
needs
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 to change their choices.
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,
according to
 Oman TV , in some developed countries when
the
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awareness
increase
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 70% of
people
 turn to healthy routines.
Next,
governments could
also
helped
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 by forcing citizens to pay fast
food
tax
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 and if they spend more than one meal on week they are responsible for their cost of healthcare
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,
means
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this
 issue
it
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could be solved or at
less
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 decline sharply. In conclusion,
although
 the junk
food
 problem
rise
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 because of busy days , turning their lifestyle to
healthier
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a healthier
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 life helps to
reducing
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 it and
government
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 should ask those
how
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who
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 eat junk foods daily to pay tax and
the
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healthcare is their responsibility .
Moreover
, healthy and fast choices are available
this
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 days
people
 need to think
in
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 their choices.
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