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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: • Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly • Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours • Suggest what should be done about the problem

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of Amir Temur Street and I am writing to you to complain about the issues
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 collection system in our neighbourhood. Our local area is full of breathtaking views.
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, these days, we are suffering from the system of collecting rubbish. Previously, they used to collect trash twice a week but now they barely come to gather it once a fortnight. As
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 result of
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, the amount of garbage is increasing rapidly. Without
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,
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 of diseases,
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 as an allergy, infection and a lack of breathing among the residents, especially youngsters and the elderly. I suggest that you should take more employees on
this
 system or we are eager to do community work to clean the environment as volunteers. I look forward to receiving your prompt reply to my letter and a solution to
this
 issue as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Asomiddin Saydusmonov
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task achievement
Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt. You have missed mentioning how the rubbish collection system is not working properly in your letter. Include specific details and examples to support your claim.
coherence cohesion
While the overall coherence and cohesion of your letter is good, consider using more cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases to connect your ideas. This will help to improve the flow of your writing.
lexical resource
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetition of words and phrases. Use synonyms and varied sentence structures to make your writing more engaging.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and use a variety of complex and compound sentences to demonstrate your grammatical range. Also, check for errors in subject-verb agreement and punctuation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rubbish collection schedule
  • overflow
  • accumulation
  • attracts pests
  • health hazards
  • unsightly appearance
  • foul odors
  • quality of life
  • reliable
  • frequent
  • community awareness programs
  • waste reduction
  • recycling
  • community composting solutions
  • organic waste
  • installation
  • public bins
  • strategic locations
  • littering
  • residential bins
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