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little exercise is done by adults Some people believe that showing sporting events on television is a way to encourages adults to exercise more. Others think there are better ways to do so. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#exercise #adults #people #events #television
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daily life has been crucial role for everyone because
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 to junk food which can cause obesity
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. Few masses opine that watching sport games are forcing to crowd to do daily
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exercise
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 for all
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folks .
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 television are fruitful to anyone.
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 begin with, in
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 era , people are busy
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 for them.
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,
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, youtube offer different
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exercise
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free of cost that would be
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 the other ostensibly side, some things are different like, if youngers go to the park where they meet different types of people where they learn how they
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exercise
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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