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The world's most urgent problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree?

#world #over-population
It is widely believed that a majority of
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 problem is
population
 explosion. Personally, I
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strongly
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 a variety of reasons. First of all, the world's most urgent problem is over-
population
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 in a lack of accommodation.
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 a small number of available housing is not able to meet the demand for the need of the living facility.
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, Ho Chi Minh City is hosting more than 9 million people and the majority of the
population
 is homeless.
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, the world's most urgent problem is
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population
 would lead to water pollution. The larger the
population
, the greater the amount of wastewater and waste, which leads to serious pollution of water sources.
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 In conclusion, uncontrolled
population
 growth will cause many of the problems mentioned above.
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