Some people believe that in near future, the role of teachers will be diminished and they will be replaced by robots and AI. To what extent do you agree?
In
this
globalised world
, technology
has begun to cover a bigger part of our lives. Technology
is in banks, hospitals, at parks and even in schools right now. The introduction of technology
into schools has spawned a new debate: will the part of teachers in schools be taken by robots
and AI? Although
many people
do not think so, the number of people
who think it will happen is quite high. I agree with the second group in terms of perfection, innovation and empowerment. Reasons will be given bellow.
Firstly
, the technology
has been improved unbelievably fast than everybody’s thought. This
can be a reason to give a chance to technology
and robots
in future. After all, during corona-quarantine humankind had to believe what they innovated. All adults spend their time with computers for their works and all children must take online lessons from morning till night. Somehow, they have survived from those times very well thanks to technology
and robots
.
Secondly
, people
are complex creatures with some defects. One of these defects is very important for teaching: remembering. Unfortunately, people
cannot remember everything what they learned in their life compared to robots
. Robots
have been programmed to accomplish their goal and for this
they have only the necessary software. Robot teachers will not be tired and not forgot something about their lessons. Their only one goal will be to teaching.
Lastly
, all person has different types of learning. Some people
can learn visualised, some by hearing and some by reading. There is so many ways of learning and a teacher cannot be able to teach all these types, but robots
can access any information they want thanks to their advanced software. For example
, lastly
, a robot named Sophia has become so popular, because this
robot is able to speak all languages, make internet research during a conversation and all these craziness happening under five seconds.
Long story short, the world
has begun to shrink thanks to technology
. People
want to become citizens of world
and the key to globalisation is technology
and robots
. Humankind wanting to become citizens of world
is almost ready to get educated by robots
. This
will happen any soon.Submitted by Özgür Denerel on
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