Children have too much freedom nowadays. Do you agree or disagree ? Why ?

It is widely believed that nowadays everyone sees
children
have
Wrong verb form
as having
show examples
too much freedom. Personally, I neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
view for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that
children
have too much freedom.
This
means that because nowadays parents are very comfortable educating their
children
, don'
t
catch their child going to work to find money so
children
don'
t
know do everything. Another reason can be that
children
don'
t
have targets for them.
For example
, a child will not know what to do if parents don'
t
instruct
they
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
must do and educate
children
over comfortable
then
Capitalize word
Then
show examples
children
will
have
Verb problem
become
show examples
laziness so
children
always have much free time.
On the other hand
, I disagree with the viewpoint that
children
always have too much free time.
Firstly
, some
children
are very busy because go to work to earn money to help their family.
For example
, a man with
children
near my house who goes to work from 6 AM to 9 PM When a man's
children
come back home he goes to bed to sleep and
continue
Correct subject-verb agreement
continues
show examples
.
Secondly
, some
children
are very hard to study because they want to have good results.
For example
, a girl near my house I see she learn English every day from 6 AM to 10 AM and 6 PM to 9PM because she wants to have gifts from her parent, she feel comfortable and fun so she is
also
very busy. In conclusion,
although
nowadays
children
have too much
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
free time, I'm convinced that some
children
are
Verb problem
find it
show examples
very hard to overcome many difficulties.
Submitted by yeshomeclass on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: