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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart depicts the
percentage
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 of
Coffee
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 and
Tea
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 consumption habits among Australian
people
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks. The data is divided into five areas in Australia (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart).
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the proportion of
people
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 who buy and drink
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the café is dominating in all cities except
Adelaide
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.
In addition
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, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in all cities is lower than that of instant
coffee
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. Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart have similar proportions of drinking
coffee
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 and
tea
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 habits with the highest
percentage
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 is
people
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 who are going to the café at 61%, 64%, 55%, and 63%, respectively. In Sydney and Melbourne, there are more than 40% who purchase fresh
coffee
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. ,
Meanwhile
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 in Brisbane and Hobart, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who are consuming fresh
coffee
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 is below 40%.
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, In
Adelaide
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, exactly half of the population consumes instant
coffee
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 and slightly below that of
people
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 buying
coffee
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 or
tea
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 by going to a café.
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, similar to other cities in Australia,
Adelaide
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also
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 has a similar pattern of
people
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 who purchase fresh
coffee
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 less than 35% of the population.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, coffee, tea, people, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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