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A glance at the given maps reveal the changes of a bookstore within the 23 years period.

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A glance at the given maps
reveal
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 the changes of a bookstore within the
23 years
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23-year
 period.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that two of the maps have
a
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change
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changed
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 by replacing places and adding
cafe
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now
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. In 2000, the bookstore had several types of book genres,
such
 as
fiction
, non-
fiction
, travel, art, hobbies, cookery and new books,
however
 the next 23 years the store witnessed
a dramatic changes
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.
Therefore
, more noticeable is that cafe construction and replacement of places.
Moreover
, Travel, New books and service desk and Entrance are remained
at
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 the left side of the bookstore.
Also
,
Fiction
 shelves decreased and
divided
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by
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 four sections
like
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Art, Hobbies, Cookery and
Fiction
, which
are
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 redeveloped in size.
Whereas
,
Fiction
 shelf on the right side of the bookshop was demolished and replaced by Non-
fiction
 genres. Eventually, the tables are put in the middle of the shop which is opposite
to
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the cafe.
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