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Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 day and age, health ,education, and trade has become an integral part of poorer
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 and it has been exerting a profound influence on their economy. Yet when it comes to whether the
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 of richer
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 should take more responsibility for helping poorer
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 or not. I will give my own perspective is that the
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 need to help these poorer areas. There are two reasons following.
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, poorer states can profit from
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' assistance. Exactly speaking, they can be in a better situation.
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 getting resources
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 as funds, talents and facilities, poorer
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 can have the ability to develop various areas. They can access great education easily and pay more attention to health. And other
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 can trade with poor
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 automatically. What is more,
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 can inspire poorer states, they can get more reputation. Help from authorities can motivate poorer
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 to make their living condition better and bring them confidence in life. poorer states will have a great regard for
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.
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, poor
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 should not be dependent on
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 too much. First of all, they need to efficiently use resources from
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.
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, healthy equipment and medical facilities are very important for people's lives, so poor
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 should spend a lot of money on them. If they are independent of
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, they can find the right way to be rich. And the assistance from authorities can be hurtful for them and the financial support can be wasted. By way of conclusion, I concede that
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 should help poor
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 to some extent. It is essential for them to get away from poor conditions.
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, poor
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 should appreciate these resources and use them efficiently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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