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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #people #population #governments #society
In
today’s
society
, there is an ongoing debate about
if
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whether
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 the
increasingly
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elder
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elderly
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 people numbers are
troubles
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trouble
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 for
governments
. In my opinion, I agree that
large
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a large
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 number of elder people are really a big problem in
today’s
 circumstance. First of all, because the population of our world
begin
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is beginning
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 a boom surge upward, a quite number of
society
resources
 are not enough for us to use, especially medical
resources
. So here is the problem,
elders
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Elders
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 would consume more medical
resources
 to
remain
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maintain
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 their energy to live, but
cause
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because
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of
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apply
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young
generations
 grow up, they have more requirements
in
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for
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 medical
resources
 but
elders
 still occupy those
resources
. Some of
young
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the young
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 generation can not enjoy enough
resources
 will
cause
 more conflict between
government
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the government
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 and
public
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the public
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.
Secondly
, because
the
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of the
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 daily
increasing
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apply
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age, some
elders
 begin to rely on their age to strain other young
generations
, especially in China it is not unusual
otherwise
 it
happen
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happens
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 every single day
this
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This
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 behaviour already
cause
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caused
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 a lot of reports to
government
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the government
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.
Finally
,
elders
 would hard to accept new things,
such
 as new laws and technologies
also
 become
slowly
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slow
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 to learn those new staff.
On the other hand
, daily
increasingly
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increasing
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elders
 is negative for
today’s
society
,
it
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as it
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 will
cause
 more conflict between
governments
 and
public
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the public
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.
For instance
,
cause
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because
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 the population of
elders
grow up
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is growing
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 so fast,
governments
 have to pay a lot of pensions from
government
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the government
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 vault,
it
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which
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 would
cause
this
 year’s GDP
slightly
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 decline and it
not
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is not
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 a good signal.
Governments
 hope to
stable
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apply
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increase GDP each year, but
elders
 broke
this
 daydream.
Furthermore
, young
generations
 must produce a large gap with
elders
, not only
age
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in age
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also
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but also
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 in views and
attitude
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attitudes
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for
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toward
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same
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the same
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 thing. It continuously
produce
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produces
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 conflict between
governments
 and
elders
 would implicate
today’s
society
.
Moreover
,
elders
prefer
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toprefer
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 keep old customs and things from
ancestor
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ancestors
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, but as time
past
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passed
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,
today’s
generations
do
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are
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 not willing to obey those old customs,
everything
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and everything
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 become worse. In conclusion, I totally agree that as time goes by
increasingly
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increasing
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number
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the number
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 of
elders
 would be
troubles
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trouble
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 for
governments
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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