In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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society
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, there is an ongoing debate about
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people numbers are
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for
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. In my opinion, I agree that
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number of elder people are really a big problem in
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circumstance. First of all, because the population of our world
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a boom surge upward, a quite number of
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resources
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are not enough for us to use, especially medical
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. So here is the problem,
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elders
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would consume more medical
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to
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their energy to live, but
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cause
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of
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apply
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young
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grow up, they have more requirements
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medical
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but
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still occupy those
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. Some of
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generation can not enjoy enough
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more conflict between
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and
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, because
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daily
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age, some
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begin to rely on their age to strain other young
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, especially in China it is not unusual
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every single day
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this
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behaviour already
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a lot of reports to
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.
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,
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would hard to accept new things,
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as new laws and technologies
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become
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to learn those new staff.
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, daily
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elders
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is negative for
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society
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,
it
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as it
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will
cause
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more conflict between
governments
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and
public
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the public
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.
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,
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cause
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the population of
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grow up
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is growing
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so fast,
governments
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have to pay a lot of pensions from
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the government
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vault,
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would
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this
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year’s GDP
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decline and it
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a good signal.
Governments
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hope to
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apply
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increase GDP each year, but
elders
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broke
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daydream.
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, young
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must produce a large gap with
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, not only
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in age
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also
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but also
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in views and
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for
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toward
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same
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the same
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thing. It continuously
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conflict between
governments
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and
elders
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would implicate
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society
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.
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,
elders
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prefer
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keep old customs and things from
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ancestors
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, but as time
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passed
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,
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generations
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do
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not willing to obey those old customs,
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and everything
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become worse. In conclusion, I totally agree that as time goes by
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number
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the number
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of
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would be
troubles
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trouble
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for
governments
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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