The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
pie chart depicts the figures for travel made by younger people in a nation in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using some modes of transport It is clear from the graph that the most common way to take a trip in 1990 is walking
while
in 2010 by car.
According to
what is shown, the total
number
of in 1990 by used a car was almost 11
million
while
in 2010 was more than 4
million
The
number
of children who walked in that time in 1990 was nearly 2,200,000 and the other year was 6,000,000. Cyclingin 2010 was 2
million
and in1990 was more than 6
million
However
, the
number
of walking and bus was almost 6
million
while
in 1990 was just half. In 1990 the
number
of children who used the bus was 7
million
while
in 2010 was 5
million
To sum up
, we could say that, in 2010 transportation was used more than in 1990 in different modes except car passengers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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