The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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The given table depicts the data of Ashdown

Museum

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visitors

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while

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the pie charts explain the

satisfaction

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survey

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results

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from

visitors

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during the year before and after renovation.

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, throughout the period after the refurbishment, there was a growth in the total of

museum

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visitors

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and

satisfaction

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results from the visitor’s surveys compared to the period before the revitalization. At the beginning of the period before the refurbishment of the

museum

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, the visitor’s number stood at 74,000

visitors

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, it increased significantly by 18,000

visitors

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after the

museum

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did the renovation.

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surveys, the

visitors

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who rated their experience as very satisfied prior to the renovation started at 15% before facing an increase of 20% after the refurbishment.

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, the population of satisfied

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rose from 30% to 40%.

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, during the year after the revitalization of the

museum

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, the proportion of respondents dissatisfied and very dissatisfied faced a decline at 5% and 15%, respectively.

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, those respondents who decided to have no response in the

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surveys were stable at exactly the same number at 5% before and after the

museum

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revitalization.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

refurbishment
visitor statistics
satisfaction survey
seasonal trends
demographics
benchmarking
feedback mechanisms
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customer experience
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user engagement
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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam’’ How true do you think this statement is? What are measures can the government take to discourage people from using their cars?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?