nowadays,a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medecines and treayments instead of visiting thie usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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an increasing number of
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some problems
plan
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to use alternative
medications
to therapy rather than to see a
doctor
in the hospital. In
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I will give some reasons why it is a negative development. I understand that there are many persons choose to buy medicines in clinics to cure themselves.
People
in
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of
this
idea may think that it is expensive to go to the hospital because they are likely to do many checks to look for the cause of illnesses.
For
this
reason, it may not only cost lots of money, but
also
take a large amount of time, and they probably not find out why are they getting ill.
Also
, it is too difficult to register at the hospital, especially the famous
doctor
. Sometimes if patients want to make an appointment with a famous
doctor
,
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need to find some agencies to help
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register, which may take plenty of time to wait. Given
this
, it probably
lead
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to patients missing the right time of treatment. I feel,
however
, it is important to see a
doctor
to treat the health disease. An important reason is that there are many
medications
which must be taken under the
doctor
’s guidance. If not, you are probably in danger and face
with
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life risks that could be worse than health problems. Another reason is
the
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patients want to choose the right
medications
under the instruction of doctors
,
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because ordinary
people
lack the knowledge of
medications
. Meanwhile using drugs obeys the
doctor
’s advice so that the drugs may well give play to the best function.
As a result
, they are likely to recover soon.
To sum up
, I am of the opinion that
people
who want to use medication to treat their health problems is a negative development.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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