nowadays，a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medecines and treayments instead of visiting thie usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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an increasing number of

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some problems

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to use alternative

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to therapy rather than to see a

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in the hospital. In

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I will give some reasons why it is a negative development. I understand that there are many persons choose to buy medicines in clinics to cure themselves.

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idea may think that it is expensive to go to the hospital because they are likely to do many checks to look for the cause of illnesses.

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reason, it may not only cost lots of money, but

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take a large amount of time, and they probably not find out why are they getting ill.

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, it is too difficult to register at the hospital, especially the famous

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. Sometimes if patients want to make an appointment with a famous

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need to find some agencies to help

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to patients missing the right time of treatment. I feel,

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, it is important to see a

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to treat the health disease. An important reason is that there are many

medications

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which must be taken under the

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’s guidance. If not, you are probably in danger and face

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life risks that could be worse than health problems. Another reason is

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patients want to choose the right

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under the instruction of doctors

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because ordinary

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lack the knowledge of

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. Meanwhile using drugs obeys the

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’s advice so that the drugs may well give play to the best function.

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, they are likely to recover soon.

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, I am of the opinion that

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who want to use medication to treat their health problems is a negative development.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

307 words

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nowadays，a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medecines and treayments instead of visiting thie usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A young person will start work at your office next month to gain work experience. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter •inform him/her about the work that needs to be done at the office; •explain what he/she is supposed to do on the first day; •suggest what he/she should bring to work.

Society now has the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world, due to the improvement of automation. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people find it difficult to manage their money. How could the government help prevent debt problems and support such people.

These days people in some countries are living in a “throwaway” society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away. What do you think is the cause and what problem will it lead to?