The diagrams below show how glass containers, such as glass bottles are produced and recycled

The diagrams below show how glass containers, such as glass bottles are produced and recycled
The first flow chart depicts the process of making glass
containers
, which are bottles
while
the second one illustrates the ways to restore them
Overall
,
to make
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making
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the bottles,
it
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required a total of four steps and a few ingredients. And about five steps to convert the
containers
before turning them into other items.
At the first stage
of the process, some materials
such
as sand, soda ash, limestone and other chemicals are mixed.
Then
the mixture
is
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melted in a furnace which was about 1500 degrees Celsius. After that, the hot glass is put out and
then
shaped by blowing. In the end, the glass
containers
were made.
On the other hand
, when recycling. All used
containers
are being collected, followed by separating the colour of them.
The next step is
removing the impurities inside. After that, all the sorted bottles are
being
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smashed and melted before moulding to create new products.
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