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The chart below provides information about the 5 types of transportation that tourists used in a particular city between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below provides information about the 5 types of transportation that tourists used in a particular city between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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bar graph illustrates the data about the proportion of tourists and five different types of travel methods which they used in a particular city from 1989 to 2009.
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, the
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 of cars has increased,
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 the
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 of coaches has decreased.
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, aeroplanes were not a popular travelling method among tourists over the entire span. Regarding the given graph, there can be seen an increase in car
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. In 1989, approximately 7% of travellers opted for cars for their travelling
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 it rose significantly by 35%.
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, at the beginning, approximately 37% of people used coaches as a travelling method
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 it declined drastically by 15%.
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, in 1999, approximately a quarter of visitors used all transport modes except aeroplanes. When it comes to aeroplane mode, in 1989, about 5% of people used aeroplanes for travelling. After ,that it has fallen down.
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, the
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 of trains and the metro has been stable over the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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