The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g. gas and oil. To what extent do you agree/ disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

The usage of fossil
fuel
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is very high nowadays. To conserve it for basic needs, the international community has taken some very serious steps
towards
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. They are making sure to reduce the use of it for the betterment of our atmosphere. In
this
essay, I will explain to what extent I agree
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it and will support my view with the help of examples.
To begin
with, we know that climate change is one of the leading
problem
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in the world. Humans’ unsustainable activities
such
as
,
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burning of petrol, coal, diesel etc are responsible for it. They do benefit us in
short
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time but in
long
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time are harmful to
environment
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the environment
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.
For instance
, Australia has one of the busiest train
route
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in the world.
Due to
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they burn a lot of coal and
as a
result
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the ozone layer in
environment
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the environment
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is 80% damaged towards their side, leading to severe skin
damages
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.
Furthermore
, different organizations around the globe combined and formed a new set of rules called Sustainable Development Goals (
SDG
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). These rules provide methods on how we can
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the atmosphere i.e., by planting trees that will bring back greenery and freshness.
For example
,
last
year Pakistan was going through severe
environment
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challenges.
However
, the Prime Minister established a scheme in which within one month the citizens
has
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to plant over 1 billion trees and
as a
result
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we find a lot of positive impact and
freshnss
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freshness
.
Although
, it is true that the use of gases and various types of fuels is impossible to stop.
Nevertheless
, we should reduce its consumption and we shall do
this
not only for ourselves but for our upcoming generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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