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ar chart illustrates the different forms of gross domestic product (IT and Service industry) in the united kingdom from 1992 to 2000. These values are calculated in percentages

ar chart illustrates the different forms of gross domestic product (IT and Service industry) in the united kingdom from 1992 to 2000. These values are calculated in percentages
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The provided picture offers a comparison of the gross domestic product of industries of IT and services from 1992 to 2000 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, both industries present an increasing tendency, and the IT
industry
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 shows greater economic development. Being differentiated from the
service
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industry
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 that grows all the time, the GDP dropped slightly in the IT
industry
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 in 1996.
To begin
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 with, the GDP of IT business started at around 6% and it fluctuated around 8% from 1994 to 1996. The statistic suddenly rocketed to 12% in 1998 and kept increasing to almost 15% in 2000.
In contrast
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 with the
service
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industry
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, the growth of the IT
industry
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 is concentrated in the latter 4 years.
On the other hand
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, the
service
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industry
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 shows stable growth periodically. In the beginning, it began at 4 in 1992 and gradually climbed from 6.2% to 8% in the end. To be more specific, the GDP of
service
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 business was 7.0% and 12% respectively in 1996 and 1998.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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