It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no denying the fact that
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we must
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a number of choices
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affect
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our professional or
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it is a commonly held belief that it is crucial for people taking risks
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their job and personal
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, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider
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highly risks and it may cost you a lot.
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with, a number of the mistaken steps cannot
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as much as we think and it will take
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time to put it in
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way again.
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, these mistakes will not just affect
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you,
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may involve your friends or your family. Another point to consider, if you
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not expect the results of your risky ideas, you will disappoint yourself. It is
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possible to say that you will lose your energy and you will be afraid to take any step in the future.
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, if you have been building
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or raising your salary for
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time, it is potential to destroy it
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one word.
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,
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year, my father invested all his money
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be rich after 5 years
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he lost one million, and he
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so
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conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that everyone ought to be
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the
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side and remember these
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risk
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can be dangerous for
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and for
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who love
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  • Stagnation
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