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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since there is computer technology. Do you disagree or agree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology
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In the era of
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technological rapid advancement, there is a school of thought holding that
pulic
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public
libraries
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 are becoming
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a financial
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 burden for
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the government
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 as the
information
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 can easily be assessed online. I totally disagree with
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undeniable
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 benefits of public
libraries
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. It is understandable that many people subscribe to the elimination of public
libraries
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 for some valid reasons.
Firstly
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,Convenience is the most pivotal reason making online sources of
information
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 prevalent today as digital devices allow
human
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humans
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 to access online
information
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 instantly through simple clicks.
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, It is wholly beneficial to those who have hectic
schedule
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 and cannot travel to the local
libraries
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.
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, I contend that the aforementioned opinion is flawed to some
extents
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extent
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. First and foremost, not everyone can afford smart digital devices and connect to the high-speed Internet.Nowadays, public
libraries
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 are equipped with
a
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huge
arrays
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 of
information
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 resources and high-tech devices
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 as expensive computers with various
sofware
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software
 applications supporting data research.
This
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 inclusivity is of assistance to economically disadvantaged people, specifically,
brings
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 them opportunities to gain access to digital literacy, seek
for
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job
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jobs
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 online,
participate
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and participate
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 in online social networks.
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,
Internet
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the Internet
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 is flooded with
information
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 but not all of is accurate and reliable.
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, public
libraries
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 curate their collections to ensure the
information
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 is authenticated and reliable.
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 misinformation
are
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 bombarding on the internet,
libraries
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remains
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 a bastion of trustworthy
information
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.
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, public
libraries
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 are more than repositories of knowledge; they serve as community hubs that foster social interaction and engagement. They organize events, workshops, book clubs, and lectures that bring people together for shared learning experiences. These activities promote social cohesion, combat isolation, and nurture a sense of belonging that cannot be replicated by computer technology alone In conclusion, Online
information
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 undoubtedly brings a lot of advantages for
information
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 researchers but the assertion that maintaining public
libraries
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 is a waste of money
oversimplify
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 their significance
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