The maps illustrates differences that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps

illustrates

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illustrate

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differences that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Since the

construction

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,construction

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all parts of the hospital

was

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were

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located along the main road .

Overall

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, a comparison of the three maps reveals a change from 4 buildings to five. During the next 40

years

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,years

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the hospital experienced a number of dramatic changes. In 1960, the hospital had only

shopping

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a shopping

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centre

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, main hospital, farmland and car park. The most noticeable that

have taken

Verb problem

apply

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after 20 years

that

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apply

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the farmland

turn

Wrong verb form

turned

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into

the

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nursing

school

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Moreover

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, the shopping

centre

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was divided into two parts, one of which was a pharmacy near the hospital, and the second part was a cancer

centre

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. There was an expansion at the cancer

centre

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. The nursing

school

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building was used for

this

Linking Words

purpose.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, it was decided not to

remain

Verb problem

keep

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the nursing

school

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, and for

this

Linking Words

narrowed the car park and

build

Wrong verb form

built

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a nursing

school

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by half.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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159 words

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The maps illustrates differences that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Over-tourism in popular destinations is damaging both the environment and local cultures. What are the reasons behind this surge in tourism, and how can the negative impacts be mitigated?

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The advantages brought by the spread of English as a global language will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Research has shown that spending less time in the office can reduce the use of energy (for example, electricity, gas). Thus some companies close for some days a week. Do this advantage of this development outhweight the disadvantage