The maps illustrates differences that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The maps

illustrates

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illustrate

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differences that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Since the

construction

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,construction

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all parts of the hospital

was

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were

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located along the main road .

Overall

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, a comparison of the three maps reveals a change from 4 buildings to five. During the next 40

years

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,years

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the hospital experienced a number of dramatic changes. In 1960, the hospital had only

shopping

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a shopping

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centre

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, main hospital, farmland and car park. The most noticeable that

have taken

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apply

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after 20 years

that

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apply

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the farmland

turn

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turned

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into

the

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nursing

school

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Moreover

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, the shopping

centre

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was divided into two parts, one of which was a pharmacy near the hospital, and the second part was a cancer

centre

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. There was an expansion at the cancer

centre

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. The nursing

school

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building was used for

this

Linking Words

purpose.

Furthermore

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, it was decided not to

remain

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keep

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the nursing

school

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, and for

this

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narrowed the car park and

build

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built

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a nursing

school

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by half.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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