as public safety is of the highest importance, it is often necersary to test new products on animals.It is better for a few animals to syffer than for human life to be placed at risk by understed products.

Recently, testing new products on
animals
has become a popular topic because it is necessary for public safety and many
people
think it is worth discussing.
However
, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether testing new products on
animals
is more beneficial than testing on
people
due to
its importance to continuing
life
for society or not. Whatever each side of
argument
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thinks, I strongly agree with the idea that when compared to
tests
on
people
, it is more risky, so
animals
are used for testing better. There are a lot of reasons why I support
this
idea.
To begin
with,
life
is changing day by day.
Therefore
, many illnesses or problems happen in our
life
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.
Also
, realistic
tests
are necessary in many fields
such
as cosmetics, in pharmaceutical industry and even in food industry.
For example
, most
people
use suntan creams especially babies in order to protect from sun. If
this
cream is not tested on
animals
, it can damage our skin.
Moreover
, we may be in danger of losing our skin. What is more,
tests
are necessary to find cures and medical breakthroughs. Today, there are many diseases and these diseases are increasing, so it is better
than
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animals
suffer than
human
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humans
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.
For instance
, the corona vaccine was first tested on
animals
which are close to human DNA and
then
, the vaccines were applied
on
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human
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humans
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. If
this
experiment had not been done
animals
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first,
maybe
the
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human
life
would
end
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.
On the other hand
, the rest of the
people
think that
animals
should never be used for experiments because they have some significant reasons for it. For one thing, the
animals
are alive like humans.
Thus
, they can have the right to survive. These
tests
will lead
animals
to suffer as much as
people
and they can lose their eyes and sometimes, they can die because of
this
test. A good example
this
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is that more than 500
animals
are slaughtered to test any product. Another reason for
this
is that not all animal
tests
are important for some new products.
Thus
,
scientist
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can use computer simulations rather than testing
animals
because it is possible nowadays.
To sum up
, in spite of the fact that animal testing
are
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bad for
animals
,
people
’s lives are more crucial than
animals
’ lives, so we have no choose to
do
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experiment on
animals
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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