as public safety is of the highest importance, it is often necersary to test new products on animals.It is better for a few animals to syffer than for human life to be placed at risk by understed products.

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Recently, testing new products on

animals

has become a popular topic because it is necessary for public safety and many

people

think it is worth discussing.

However

, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether testing new products on

animals

is more beneficial than testing on

people

due to

its importance to continuing

life

for society or not. Whatever each side of

argument

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the argument

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thinks, I strongly agree with the idea that when compared to

tests

people

, it is more risky, so

animals

are used for testing better. There are a lot of reasons why I support

this

idea.

To begin

with,

life

is changing day by day.

Therefore

, many illnesses or problems happen in our

life

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lives

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Also

, realistic

tests

are necessary in many fields

such

as cosmetics, in pharmaceutical industry and even in food industry.

For example

, most

people

use suntan creams especially babies in order to protect from sun. If

this

cream is not tested on

animals

, it can damage our skin.

Moreover

, we may be in danger of losing our skin. What is more,

tests

are necessary to find cures and medical breakthroughs. Today, there are many diseases and these diseases are increasing, so it is better

than

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that

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animals

suffer than

human

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humans

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For instance

, the corona vaccine was first tested on

animals

which are close to human DNA and

then

, the vaccines were applied

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human

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humans

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. If

this

experiment had not been done

animals

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with animals

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first,

maybe

the

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apply

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human

life

would

end

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have ended

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On the other hand

, the rest of the

people

think that

animals

should never be used for experiments because they have some significant reasons for it. For one thing, the

animals

are alive like humans.

Thus

, they can have the right to survive. These

tests

will lead

animals

to suffer as much as

people

and they can lose their eyes and sometimes, they can die because of

this

test. A good example

this

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of this

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is that more than 500

animals

are slaughtered to test any product. Another reason for

this

is that not all animal

tests

are important for some new products.

Thus

scientist

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scientists

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can use computer simulations rather than testing

animals

because it is possible nowadays.

To sum up

, in spite of the fact that animal testing

are

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bad for

animals

people

’s lives are more crucial than

animals

’ lives, so we have no choose to

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apply

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experiment on

animals

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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15Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

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398 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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as public safety is of the highest importance, it is often necersary to test new products on animals.It is better for a few animals to syffer than for human life to be placed at risk by understed products.

Include an introduction and conclusion

People find it difficult to speak in front of the public or to give a presentation. How important is to speak well in public. Do you think children at school should be taught public speaking?

obesity has become an issue in some Western countries, especially among children. What are the reasons behind, and what effects does it have on individuals' life

"The internet has transformed the way we communicate and interact with each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Some people believe that young people should spend their time with family, rather than go to entertainment activities outsides the house. Some disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.