Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everything matters is likely to result in a society of individual who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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decisions may lead to
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results. I firmly believe that
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if parents give them enough
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world, it has become a pre-requirement for infants to be more independent.
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way that learn to handle their calamities individually and that would
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giving them enough liberty in order to decide
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their path.
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permission,
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, can foster generation with a significant skill in analytical thinking.
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, the benefit of individual choices can be revealed when
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have to decide what
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shirt to wear. In
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situation, they should evaluate opposite things and that would lead them to think with detail and opt meticulously in future.
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them adversely, but
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to live based on their choices they can not adapt
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other contrary opinions or decisions.
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they may think that all the things in the world should be planned based on their desire.
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with novel environment and people. To add, it might affect their future career path too. As they have grown with their own rules they are more likely to rebel against the
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that have been legislated for some
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the merits of giving freedom to
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an edge over the demerits as
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more creative
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child autonomy
  • Critical thinking
  • Self-confidence
  • Immediate gratification
  • Long-term benefits
  • Guidance
  • Informed choices
  • Boundaries
  • Responsibility
  • Individuality
  • Empathetic citizens
  • Consequences
  • Decision-making
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