The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data illustrates the total
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of speed cameras used,
as well as
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the figures on road accidents in Melbourne.
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that not only
the
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number
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of cameras increase in the 3-year period but
also
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the
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of road accidents and deaths. In 2002, the
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of cameras is only about
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the value shows a steady rise in 2004, before experiencing a dramatic increase in 2005. From over 50 in 2004 to approximately under 150 in
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in 2005, respectively. On the one hand, the
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of accidents that occurred on the road throughout the given period fluctuated and the percentage hovered around 3% until 2004. After that, the
number
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of cases almost doubled when it reached the year 2005.
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, the
number
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of deaths is significantly lower and from 2002 to 2003 the value hovered at under 1% before soaring significantly at its peak at under 2%.
Then
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it gradually decreased in 2005 to about 1%.
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