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In the circumstances of the present-day world, children should be given every encouragement to regard the learning of several languages as normal; to suggest the contrary seems both prejudiced and harmful. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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Today's new generation of
children
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 are more willing to learn new kinds of stuff than the previous generation
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 the fact that time has changed and ,nowadays,
children
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 are interested and curious to discover new things.In
this
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 essay, I will argue how society will benefit if they support their
children
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's desire for learning.
Parents
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 should support their
children
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 no matter what, as denying a
child
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's desire to learn might cause them issues regarding their education, confidence, mental health and much more.
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,
children
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 who want to learn several
languages
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 will help them develop their brain and complex thinking , as they can think in different
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.
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,
children
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 who learn different
languages
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 now can help them later in life when they are trying to get a job and will be more successful than the rest as they have in the CV that they can speak several
languages
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 which is a key point for understanding another nation culture and tradition that will help them get the job.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 who want to speak several
languages
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 might lose their own identity,
such
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 as forgetting the words of their own mother tongue, or forgetting about their own culture in order to adapt to the one that the
children
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 are learning about.
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,
children
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 learning different
languages
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 can be difficult as they are still young, and a lot of pressure from their
parents
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 might cause them stress and anxiety, as some
parents
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 are strict about their
children
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's education and want them to know everything, which is impossible and
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 that a childhood might be ruined.
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, in my opinion, letting your own
child
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 learn new
languages
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 not only benefits him but
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 the community,
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, as long as,
parents
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 do not put pressure on their
child
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's shoulder and the
child
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 is willing to learn , there should be no problem for the
children
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 to learn about other nation's language.
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