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Many people believe that the human society has developed into a throw-away society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish. People consume and they do not think about the environment.

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Nowadays, the word consumerism has become a global pandemic for modern society. The tendency to "
throw-away
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 and buy again" has been increasing enormously for the
last
 few decades. In my essay, I will discuss the possible positive and negative impacts of consumerism on the environment and how people can improve their attitude towards to the care about the planet. It is not a secret that the population of humanity has dramatically increased since the
last
 century. People have a better standard of living at the present time compared to the past.
In addition
, the style of life has changed and now we want to earn good money in order to go to the shop and buy everything that we want. But,
rarely
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who
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apply
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thinks
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think
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 about the consequences of consuming and what impact it has on the planet.
For example
, in any food
store
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 every piece of vegetable or fruit is covered by
plastic
 paper,
moreover
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 it is hard to find any item without
plastic
. Unfortunately, a big part of the
plastic
 rubbish will end up in oceans or in any other
nature
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natural
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 place. Scientists have published a report that If humans do not start to
changing
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 their habits and stop using
plastic
, in the
nearest
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 future the environment will suffer dramatically.
In addition
, the population of many animal species will instinct forever. 
To conclude
, people need to stop buying things unconsciously in order to get rid of them after a short time just because they want to get a new one. Society has to the responsibility for the environment and the well-being of the planet. The consumerism of the goods which contain
plastic
 leads to the danger of our world and nature, and we can not ignore that.
Otherwise
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 there is no chance for a successful future.
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