The values that we learn from our parents and family have greater influence on our future success than knowledge and skills we learn at school. Agree or disagee?

Success

is determined by many factors. Some

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the values taught by one’s upbringing

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a key role. Others are of the belief that

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and skills one learns at

school

are more important. In my opinion,

both

of the factors are equally important.

Firstly

, our parents and family always have

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influence on us.

Children

are akin to a blank sheet, they often learn by observing their environments.

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, parents have to be

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good role

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in order for

children

to form the correct attitude. Parents who portray perseverance in challenging times

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a good example to

children

not to give up easily.

As a result

,

children

then

carry these good mentalities in their life and it is useful in helping them to get through the tough times and ultimately achieve

success

.

Secondly

, to succeed, formal education plays a vital role too.

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equips

children

with the right

knowledge

and skills in order for them to thrive in the societies. From different languages to mathematics to science subjects, the purpose of education is to prepare the necessary human resources for the future. Many times, a well-educated fresher has better opportunities to be hired compared to their peers who have poor grades. A good start in

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means

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chance

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being successful in life. Upon considering the views of

both

sides,

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both

the values we learn from our upbringings and the

knowledge

we pick up from

school

contribute significantly to our future

success

. They complement each other. A brainy person without the right attitude is hard to succeed.

For example

, a colleague who has great on-the-job

knowledge

but

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integrity is unlikely to be at

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of

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. In conclusion,

both

values from family and

knowledge

from

school

are necessary to achieve

success

. With either of the

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missing will be like trying to clap with one hand.

Both

of these have to be complementing each other for greater output.