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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays
people
 leading a hectic lifestyle which has changed
people
's
food
 circle and behavior significantly. The increasing pattern of using fast
food
 has assisted
people
 with their busy lifestyles. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples and try to draw some conclusions. The first and foremost reason is junk foods are unhealthy for the human body and can cause a vast number of illnesses in the frame.
For example
, nowadays both men and women are working and they do not have enough
time
 to prepare their own healthy meals in the morning
time
due to
 lack of
time
.
Hence
,
people
 always prefer to choose pre-packaged foods in their working place which is quite easy and quick. But eating these kinds of
food
 for a long
time
 may affect their internal organs and can cause damage to their bone as well.
As a consequence
,
people
 are suffering from a considerable amount of diseases in their later life stage.
Secondly
, ready-made meals can cause digestion problems. These days, some manufacturers are not using the proper ingredients and
also
 not following good hygienic practices, which may lead to lots of troubles in the human body.
For example
, nowadays in ,newspapers we can see many notices regarding
food
 poisoning.
People
 are earning a lot in their young stage and spending that money to cure diseases in their old stage, which represents a useless lifestyle.
Hence
, consuming these kinds of foods is not recommended for all communities to lead a healthy lifestyle. Turning to the other side of the argument, junk
food
 may be helpful to
people
 in critical situations. To be more precise, Usually in a home women make
food
 for their family; but in some ,situations she is not able to cook. In
this
 ,case preparing pre-packaged meals would be useful. To sum it up, consuming instant Grub may have an enormous number of effects on the community. A most common problem is poor nutrition and foodstuff poisoning which can make us spend more money to cure those diseases and damage parts of the body.
However
, in terms of ,emergency it would be very useful.
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task response
The essay lacks a clear and comprehensive response to the given prompt. The opinion is not adequately supported with relevant examples and the response does not fully address the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a basic level of coherence and cohesion. Although the introduction and conclusion are present, the logical structure of the essay could be improved for better flow and organization of ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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