You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre. You want to find out more about these lessons. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In the letter ● describe how well you can swim at the moment ● explain why you want to learn to swim better ● enquire about the time and cost of the swimming lessons

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Dear Sir or Madam, Recently, I have noticed your promotions in the India Today newspaper, about ,you are offering summer swimming classes going to start on 1st April at Beach View apartments community swimming pool. I am

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living in the same community with my parents. I would be wondering if you allow me to join in classes. At a tender age, I learned basic swimming techniques, I hope it will help me to start immediately. In a nutshell, I had a dream of becoming a professional swimmer and participating in national-level competitions. My parents are

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supportive of any type of sports.

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, I want to know more details about the fee structure and duration of the course.

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, I am living in the same community and I have enough free time, to attend classes if it is in the morning or evening. Yours faithfully, Anand

Submitted by anand.gnt92 on Fri Sep 08 2023

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

147 words

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