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The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now.

The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now.
#maps #show #changes #city
The supplied charts represent changes from 1950 and
present
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the present
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 version of the city.
Overall
, contemporary
variation
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variations
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 of
map
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maps
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 experienced crucial changes, the only river’s collocation that did not
changed
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change
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. All aspects of areas
replaced
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were replaced
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 and constructed. Taking
look
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a look
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 at the details of the
map
 in 1950,
residential
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the residential
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 district was in the middle of the
center
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centre
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, divided into four parts by each cardinal
points
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point
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.
Placement
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The placement
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 of
business
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the business
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 area captured the
north-west
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northwest
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 and east
side
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sides
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 of the
map
.
However
, above
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the river
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river
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,river
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 there was
government
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a government
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 building, which was
nearby
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near
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 small
sized
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small-sized
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 bridge. Getting to the details of the current view of
city
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the city
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, the total number of citizens
consist
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consists
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 of 200,000,
that
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which
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 makes growth from
past
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the past
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 (20,000). Business places and residential locations
build up
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were
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 enlarged
in
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on
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 the
map
, so
therefore
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apply
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additional
bridge
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bridges
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 and government
building
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buildings
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constructed
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were constructed
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 in the
south
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southern
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 part of the
map
. Close by the river,
lake
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a lake
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 was set up in the centre of the
map
.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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