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you are working in a sports centre. tell your friend about a position available in your company. How you know about it what the positon offers why your are telling him

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Dear Marry I am writing
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 letter to let you know that my company is offering a
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. Currently, I'm working as a customer service representative in a sports centre and it's been almost 3 months I've been working for
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 company. I came to know about
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position
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 from my uncle who is the manager here.
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 I believe that you will be the right fit for
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position
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 since you have good experience in customer service.
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,
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 company pays more than minimum wage,
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, they are supporting me with my tuition,and I believe they will do that for you as well. And
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position
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 will help you to gain some experience which will be going to help you in the future. Let me explain why I'm telling you about
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job
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. I remember when we met two months ago, you mentioned how hard your current
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 is, so that's why I felt that
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 is the opportunity
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have you
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 been looking for.
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job
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 doesn't require any physical work, all you need to have good communication skills and help the customer
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 sitting on the chair. I hope you will consider
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job
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. I am excited to hear back from you. Your friend Akankasha
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