students should pay their full university fees themselves as they benefit from having university studying and the society as a whole. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
due to
increment
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in
universities
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cost
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, it has arisen concern among
masses
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. People are divided about the issue of whether
student
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should pay the tuition fee of their university themselves as the advantages is more for students or whether the onus is on citizens to provide the
cost
of youngsters'
education
, as they benefit from their scholars. I disagree with the first notion to some extent.
To begin
with, there are several reasons for the issue that students should
effort
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their
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cost
of their studying.
Firstly
,
education
is
a
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portable to earn
higher
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a higher
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income. As they expend more time in order to become
expert
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in a certain subject,
they
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salary would rise significantly.
As a result
of
this
matter, they can experience
high
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a high
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quality of life, without undergoing
much
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barriers in order to
fulfill
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their demands.
being
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specialist
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,
furthermore
, would help them to achieve higher
position
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positions
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in society.
Due to
this
, they can build a convenience vita even for their children.
a
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lawyer,
for instance
, who has devoted his time,
in
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this
area, with many skills can easily guide his child to step in
this
path and lead them to become successful in their pathway.
Thus
, individuals can benefit from their well-rounded
education
in numerous syntaxes.
On the other hand
, the opponents may believe that
apprentices'
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researchers may profit
public
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more than individuals for several
proof
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. As they dedicate many years of their life
for
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a specialization, they may gain deep knowledge about an issue and the method that can be used to alleviate a problem.
therefore
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,
this
can lead to glorious
achievement
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achievements
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for a whole society.
For instance
, once a researcher reveals new bacteria that can be used to cure a disease, a revolution in the case of medication may appear.
This
advancement,
furthermore
, can lift the whole level of a country and affect
their
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its
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international position. Once a state explores scientific
solution
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,
they
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it
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may stay ahead of
their
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its
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competitors.
Due to
this
day after day, they can experience improvement in their whole region.
Thus
,
due to
the higher
education
,
mammoth
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dimension of a country may influence.
To sum up
,
however
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education
cost
has turned controversial matter in
today
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life, I personally opine that individuals should undergo to pay that,
due to
the large merits that it can bring to their vita. Governments should
however
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, assign
budget
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a budget
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to
this
section to evaluate the level of
education
in a society.
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