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The charts demonstrates four types of degree granted at the National univensity in 1990, 2000, 2010.

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The charts
demonstrates
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 four types of degree granted at the National
univensity
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university
 in 1990, 2000, 2010. It is clear from the charts that
computer
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the computer
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 science degree gained more popularity throughout the years, unlike the other three majors, which either fluctuated, but remained consistent, or had a slight downfall. In 1990
computer
 science and business were both 30% and took the dominant place in the chart. Despite
this
, by 2010
computer
 science had reached a high point of 45%,
while
 business was estimated only half of
computer
sciences
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 initial rate in 1990: a modest 15%. The rates for medicine and law degrees in 1990 were 25% and 15% respectively,
then
 in 2000
it
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 fluctuated a bit, with medicine gaining five more per
cents
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cent
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,
whereas
 the situation for
law
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a law
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degree
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degrees
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 was
opposite
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, and it went 5% down. And in 2010 they went back to their initial positions of 25% and 15%.
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