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TASK 1 The trends in the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne are shown in this table.

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The trends in the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne are shown in
this
 table. Decide on which of the five fast food options available in Melbourne to eat. Hamburgers (40
pieces
) were the most popular fast food in 2005. Next comes the fried chicken that has already been cooked (35
pieces
). Currently, these two dishes are still popular, but hamburger
consumption
 has decreased by 2 units
while
 fried chicken
consumption
 has increased by 2 units. It is evident that dishes like salads (5
pieces
), fried rice (6
pieces
), and pasta (6
pieces
) are not very popular and are only consumed by a small number of people. Currently, salads
began to be
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 eaten
by
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10
pieces
 more than in 2005, and there is news that in 2025 the growth in the
consumption
 of salads will not stop and will
increase
 by 26
pieces
 more than at present. The remaining dishes,
such
 as fried rice and pasta, have not experienced any significant changes except for an
increase
 of 2-3
pieces
. In the future, there are forecasts for 2025 that the demand for fried chicken will
increase
 by 8
pieces
,
and
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hamburgers will not stop growing and the amount of
consumption
 will
increase
 by 13
pieces
 more than at present.
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