Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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children
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of their
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negative development. I think
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equal positive
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, On the positive
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. The main reason for
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case is spending more
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is because indoor activities have
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increased compared to outdoor activities.
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are getting too much knowledge. Outdoor
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activity
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more benefits on body
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the indoor activity.
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, as a school student
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more
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on phones he or she gets so much knowledge which can help
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IQ development.
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, a nation should give phones to those people who are in need.
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. From my recurrent ,experience
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children
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health. Spending more and more hours on mobile it
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too much on
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people
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lifestyle
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body
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.
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, As students spend more hours on mobile
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can affect
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its
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, the government should make
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rule for the
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to play
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at least
30 minutes on outdoor activities.
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, Kids are spending more
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phone
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which indirectly affect
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their study. phones in making kids
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always
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froom
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from
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environments
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as some
children
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are
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spend hours every day on
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their
smartphone
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have a positive.
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, as every coin have two sides
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also
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have
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two sides advantages and disadvantage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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