Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
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. I think Use synonyms
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smartphones
is because indoor activities have Use synonyms
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there
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activity
have
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has
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compare
compared
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to
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time
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Thus
, a nation should give phones to those people who are in need.
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children
health. Spending more and more hours on mobile it Change noun form
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people
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people's
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lifestyles
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body
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the body
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, As students spend more hours on mobile Linking Words
then
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their
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Hence
, the government should make Linking Words
an
rule for the Change the article
a
children
to play Use synonyms
atleast
30 minutes on outdoor activities. Correct your spelling
at least
Thirdly
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time
on Use synonyms
phone
which indirectly affect Add an article
the phone
a phone
on
their study. phones in making kids Change preposition
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aways
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as some Correct your spelling
that
children
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their
smartphone
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