Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays people are so
much
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very
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on Replace the word
dependent
smartphones
in same
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way
children
are spending a lots
of their Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
time
on smartphones
. I think this
have
two Change the verb form
has
impact
positive Change to a plural noun
impacts
as well as
negative development. I think this
have both side
equal positive as well as
negative. My viewpoint is described in the below data.
Firstly
, On the positive side
. The main reason for this
case is spending more time
on smartphones
is because indoor activities have been
increased compared to outdoor activities. Unnecessary verb
apply
Such
as As kids are using more and more smartphones
there
are getting too much knowledge. Outdoor Correct pronoun usage
they
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activity
have
more benefits on body Change the verb form
has
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compare
compared
too
the indoor activity. Correct your spelling
to
For example
, as a school student spend
more Correct subject-verb agreement
spends
time
on phones he or she gets so much knowledge which can help for
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with
Thus
, a nation should give phones to those people who are in need.
Secondly
, On the negative side
. From my recurrent ,experience this
is even affecting children
health. Spending more and more hours on mobile it Change noun form
children's
is affect
too much on Change the verb form
is affected
is affecting
the
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apply
people
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people's
lifestyle
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lifestyles
as well as
body
. Add an article
the body
For example
, As students spend more hours on mobile then
can affect on
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apply
its
eye Correct pronoun usage
their
side
. Hence
, the government should make an
rule for the Change the article
a
children
to play atleast
30 minutes on outdoor activities. Correct your spelling
at least
Thirdly
, Kids are spending more time
on phone
which indirectly affect Add an article
the phone
a phone
on
their study. phones in making kids Change preposition
apply
aways
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always
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from
enveriments
.
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environments
To conclude
, I think the
as some Correct your spelling
that
children
are
spend hours every day on Unnecessary verb
apply
thier
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their
smartphone
have a positive. Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
However
, as every coin have two sides this
also
have
two sides advantages and disadvantage.Change the verb form
has
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