the diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

The given maps provide information regarding the layout of a public

library

20 years ago, and

also

how it looks now. It is noticeable to see that there are more recreational spots available in the current layout, used for different events and entertainment than in the past.

According to

the map related to 20 years ago, there was a place available for adult fiction books which is now replaced with a reference book area.

Additionally

, there is a lecture room available in the northeastern

part

of the

library

which used to be allocated to children’s books 20 years ago.

Moreover

, the inquiry desk in the southeastern

part

of the plan is completely dedicated to a café, used for leisure activities. In the current layout, tables and chairs located in the central

part

of the

library

are removed and much more space is available in front of the entrance

part

Furthermore

, the adult fiction books section is relocated to the eastern

part

of the

library

, where an information desk and self-service machines are placed, which did not exist in the former plan.

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