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The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the rate of
time
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 spent by unemployed residents in the UK during the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it can
been
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be
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 seen that both genders
toprefer
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to prefer
prefer
search
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to search
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 for a job in the morning and leave a
leasure
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leisure
 activity for the
afternoon
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 times. To initiate, females spent most of their
time
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 in Housework which accounted for 49% in the morning and 21% in the
afternoon
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.
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, they spent 26% of their
time
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 shopping in the morning and in the
afternoon
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 which is slightly lower than 9%. The opposite gender spent 14% of their
time
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 gardening in
morning
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the morning
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 and the same index they showed in the
afternoon
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 by watching TV.
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, all of them allocate their
time
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 to Job Hunting(22% and 16%), Shopping(20% and 26%) and Houseworking(19% and 49%) during the morning.
However
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, in the evening they spent
a
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the
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 most percentage of their
time
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 on leisure activities
such
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 as TV(14% and 12%) and Visiting Friends(12% and 17%).

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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