The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart and the table illustrate the percentage of employment status of anthropology students after finishing their
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degree class and the incomes of anthropology
graduates
in
work
after five years.
It is clear that
over half of the
graduates
work
in
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full
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time
after they
graduated
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while
few of them are doing postgraduate study with part-
time
work
. Most of the
graduates
who
work
in
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the
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freelance consultants and
the
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government sector get higher salaries after five years compared to those who
work
for private companies. Looking at the data in more detail, we can see that the figure of the
graduates
who have
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time
work
accounts for 52%, which comprises the highest proportion. Followed by those who
work
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time
, the unemployed, who
work
full
time
with postgrad study comprise 15%, 12% and 8% respectively. As for those who have their
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time
job
while
studying postgrad accounts for just 5%. After five years of working, 50% of the
graduates
get paid the most (over $100,000) in the government sector, followed by 40% of those in
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freelance consultants and 30% of those in
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private companies. In comparison to private companies, only 20% of the
graduates
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salaries that are below $75,000
whereas
45% of those who
work
for private firms get paid below $75,000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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