The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

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The display graph describes the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12. The below information is on

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number of trips per year in millions. In 1990, the highest

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walking with more than 12, by car passengers it was nearly 4, by cycling it was 6, by walking and

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it was around 6 and by ,

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it was nearby 6. In 2010, the highest was by car

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with 11, by walking it was 6, by cycling it was 2, by walking and

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it was nearly 3 and by

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bus

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it was around 6. Cycling

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walking is almost similar in 2010.

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, the above data describe

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total number of trips per year in millions. The information is on children ages between 5-12.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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3 paragraphs

156 words

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