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The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12
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The display graph describes the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12. The below information is on
total
Change the article
a total
the total
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 number of trips per year in millions. In 1990, the highest
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 walking with more than 12, by car passengers it was nearly 4, by cycling it was 6, by walking and
bus
Use synonyms
 it was around 6 and by ,
bus
Use synonyms
 it was nearby 6. In 2010, the highest was by car
passenger
Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
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 with 11, by walking it was 6, by cycling it was 2, by walking and
bus
Use synonyms
 it was nearly 3 and by
Use synonyms
bus
Add a comma
,bus
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 it was around 6. Cycling
as well as
Linking Words
 walking is almost similar in 2010.
To conclude
Linking Words
, the above data describe
a
Correct article usage
the
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 total number of trips per year in millions. The information is on children ages between 5-12.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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